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Also, at present, WritePoint cannot detect quotations or block-quotes, so comments in those areas should be ignored.] American Psychological Association Suzette Lee Dr. Jeffery M. Wallmann GEN/200 February 17, 2010 For more than 100 years, the American Psychological Association (APA) has represented psychology in the United States. Based in Washington, DC APA has more than 145,000 members, making it the largest association of psychologists worldwide. The mission of the APA is to advance the creation, communication and application [Check punctuation--insert a comma before "and" if the following is the last in a series of more than two ] of psychological knowledge to benefit society and improve people’s lives. Psychologist are frequently innovators, evolving new approaches from established knowledge to meet changing needs of people and society. They develop theories and test them through their research. Many psychologist work independently. They also team up with other professionals like scientist, physicians, lawyers, and school personal. You [Eliminate second person (you, your) in academic documents and avoid addressing the reader directly. Use third-person pronouns (he, she, it, they)] can also find them in laboratories, hospitals, courtrooms and [Check punctuation--insert a comma before this word if this is the last in a list of more than two--or if it begins a new clause] prisons [Check punctuation--insert a comma before "and" if the following is the last in a series of more than two ] . Psychologist traditionally study both normal and abnormal functioning, and also treats patience with mental and emotional problems. They also concentrate on behaviors that effect the mental and emotional health and mental functioning of healthy human beings, for example me, lol. They advise [Check spelling: "advise" is a verb (He will advise you); "advice" is a noun (This is good advice)] lawyers on jury selection and collaborate with educators on school reform. They team up with law enforcement and public health officials to analyze the causes of such events and prevent their occurrences. American Psychologist Association (APA) can contribute towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] my professional knowledge and abilities by helping me understand why juveniles do the things they do, it will help me provide diagnostic interviewing services to screen and identify high-risk youths upon admissions to the Juvenile Justice Center (i.e., [Check word choice: This abbreviation stands for "id est," Latin for "that means." If the following is a list of examples, you mean "e.g.," ("exempli gratia"), Latin for "for example"] depressed, suicidal, highly aggressive or anxious youths) with the goal of making recommendations to appropriate juvenile justice staff members concerning proper management of the youth in the known areas of concern and provide intervention services, provide comprehensive psychological evaluations by carrying out clinical interviews, provide individual, family and group [Check punctuation--insert a comma before "and" if the following is the last in a series of more than two ] psychotherapy to address the emotional needs of the juvenile justice population in order to [Clear writing suggestion: the meaning will be the same (and less wordy) by removing "in order"] enhance family functioning while reducing family conflicts and stresses, make initial assessment of youths to determine risk level , [Avoid leaving a space before a comma] mental health and chemical dependency problems; I would have the knowledge on how to approach youths, families, and victims in a interview [Word choice--use "an"] , and to gather factual and social information; assesses information and recommend appropriate placement or treatment in the best interest of the youth and their families. [A sentence as long as this (55 or more words) can be confusing because it can obscure the meaning with logic twists, recursions, or interminable lists. Cut it into shorter sentences, each with a single idea. Shorter words and shorter sentences are easier to comprehend] Provide psychological consultation to the Courts, administrators and probation [Check punctuation--insert a comma before "and" if the following is the last in a series of more than two ] officers regarding case management and effective therapeutic intervention with juvenile offenders. Getting ["Getting" is informal English and can mean many things; in academic writing, use forms of "arrive at," "can," "could", "grows," "is able to," etc.] my bachelors in criminal justices it will help me to conduct research, prepare reports, and educate others on [This preposition should be "in"] matters of forensic psychology, interpret, in lay terms, complex psychological conditions and resultant behavioral traits, withstand pressure under extremely stressful conditions, to interview others to obtain insight into the behavior of juveniles of criminal conduct, to provide testimony in courts of law relative to the psychological state of juveniles and its impact [Doctoral rule (although good advice for any academic writer): "impact" is a noun (a hit). It is informally used as a verb (impacting the business), but avoid this in academic writing ] on their [Check pronoun agreement--if "their" refers to "relative" (or a singular subject), it should be singular, too (his or her)] ability to stand trial, also to conduct psychological assessment to determine criminal responsibility for illegal acts. [Sentence too long] Getting [Avoid forms of "get"] bachelors in psychology will help me with identifying the way the minds and the behaviors of juvenile and have the scientific knowledge about how they think, act, and feel, and have the ability to [Express "have the ability to" as simply "can" or "could"] apply the information to their special needs. Having [Clearer writing suggestion--"having" as a transitive verb is vague. Reconsider the sentence, as in "possessing," "acquiring," "developing," etc. Often "having" can simply be deleted] the research and writing skills, and good problem solving and have well developed, higher level thinking ability will be a good asset when analyzing, synthesizing, and evaluating information, completing in a timely matter and accurate reports to the court including findings, recommendations, and justifications for recommendations, considerations of community protection, accountability and building [Check punctuation--insert a comma before "and" if the following is the last in a series of more than two ] competency for youth as well as the victim impact implications; and testify in court. [Sentence too long]